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The Tale of a broken heart

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Once upon a summers day in the fields where we'd play i'd sit with you.
I'd sit with you for hours on end I'd sit with you because your my friend.
I made some gestures of a nature but you just sat with me without a care.

Your other friends would tell you what I knew.
I loved you that much was true.
But you just thought it was a joke.

And now your with another guy.
that made me want to I wish i'd die.

After a week you were single again.
Now I wait for my chance to make it with our love.
But for now I'll sit in the field.

I prayed for one day would come you would recognize my love for you.
That day never came so we would just sit on a summers day in the fields were we'd play.
a Poem that took me ages i'm crap with words so plz like it
© 2006 - 2024 supas-sam
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Shiri-Matakami's avatar
that was really well written, i can tell that you really feel stongly about what your writting.

the one grammer thing i will cue you in on is that when you want a pause in the sentence, i would put a comma there. and you don't always have to have put a period at the end of the line either (in case you thought you had to put them there) i usually never put commas or periods at the end of my poems (if you haven't noticed >.<, grammer is not my friend).

it was really good besides that, i can tell that you really wanted to write something, becuase you kept saying that your not that good with words, but you ending up writing this anyway. that takes a lot of thought and courage to do something that you know or think you might not be good at.

kudos to you!

i hope you write more in the future!

and don't be afraid to say or write something, you should never be afraid to say something, even if you think that its not good. the only way you get better at something is with practice! everyone has to start somewhere.

:jedi: